Working Women
Due to many historical processes the modern phenomenon of working women is not
the same of several years ago. Nowadays women can work everywhere, whereas in
the past they were expected to devote themselves to the house and the family. Today
women are able to obtain a master’s degree in any college but in past times
they were not allowed to do academic studies. Female suffrage was established
at the end of the twentieth century. However, it was very difficult for women to
participate in democracy before that time. The current role of women in work is
the consequence of a continuous development of events throughout history.
Causes of Secondary Students’ Failure
Students’ failure is something that happens very often
in the classroom and has some external and internal reasons. Some of these
reasons come from outside the classroom like having a job. Various students are
taking their first steps in the work environment when they are not at school.
Therefore, they have limited time to focus on their homework and to study.
Others see themselves affected by problems in the family such as parents
divorce, violence or problems with the law for instance. A number of other
reasons of students’ failure have their roots inside the classroom, such as
bullying and shyness. Being bullied in all its forms (verbal, physical,
psychological) has huge impact on students’ performance. The victims are likely
to have low self-esteem, anxiety and depression. Consequently, they try to
avoid going to school. Shyness is seemed as an important factor of student’s
failure because it interferes with their learning. If they have doubts about a
certain topic, they will not ask. Hence, they remain in a place of uncertainty.
These experiences cause a huge amount of stress on the students and as a
result, they become unable to concentrate on schoolwork and they fail.
The previous paragraphs were written collaboratively with two of my classmates. The parts that are underlined are not well written according to the type of paragraph we tried to write and some of them have mistakes. The main problem was the choosing of the topic sentence. It was not clear enough and it was divided in two sentences .As a result of that the supporting sentences were not appropiated.
I think that we should have taken into account the theory we had seen in the book From paragraph to essay. There are some clear examples of topic sentences and it explains how to write a paragraph developed by listing or comparison. The text also says that the concluding sentence should be just one sentence but we wrote two in the second paragraph. The parts that needed to be changed in order to improve both paragraphs will be corrected.
Working woman
The modern phenomenon of working women is the result of many historical
processes that permitted them to have a job. Some issues were stereotyped role,
professional studies and female suffrage. Firstly, modern women can work
everywhere, whereas in the past they were expected to devote themselves to the
house and the family. Secondly, today women can obtain a master’s degree in any
college but in other times they were not allowed to do academic studies. We can
appreciate a clear example of this in 1885 when Elida Passo finally
graduated in pharmacy. Moreover, even though today women can participate
in democracy, this right was not established until some years ago. To have an
idea of how difficult the possibility of participating in rights was, it is
worth mentioning that female suffrage started at the end of the twentieth
century. The current role of women in work is the consequence of a continuous
development of events throughout history, events that will lead to future
analysis.
Causes of Secondary Students’ Failure
Students’ failure is something that happens very often
in the classroom and has a wide range of reasons. Some of these reasons come
from outside the classroom like having a job and family problems among others.
Various students are taking their first steps in the work environment when they
are not at school. Therefore, they have limited time to focus on their homework
or to study. Others see themselves affected by problems in the family; parents
divorce, violence, problems with the law for instance. A number of other
reasons of students’ failure have their roots inside the classroom, such as
bullying and shyness. Being bullied in all its forms (verbal, physical,
psychological) has huge impact on students’ performance. The victims are likely
to have low self-esteem, anxiety and depression. Consequently, they will try to
avoid going to school. Even though shyness may not seem an important factor of
student’s failure, it interferes with their learning. If they have doubts about
a certain topic, they will not ask. Hence, they remain in a place of
uncertainty. Being successful at school is not simple, there is a large number
of factors that lead students into failing. These experiences cause a huge
amount of stress on the students and as a result, they become unable to
concentrate on schoolwork.
